Taylor gets a power to control a swarm of progressively more advanced nanobots.
Publicly becomes a and joins .
This was extremely good up until the very end - where and the entire fic went to shit, 3⭑ at most for that part.
So yeah, I pretend that it died a bit earlier, before that embarrassment (and this is why it’s a 5⭑).
Also I cannot believe I fell for it twice! I’ve read it a long time ago and until it happened - again - I did not remember that the end was such a complete trash.. So I felt this intense frustration and disappointment twice, ughh
Rant about that
Oh my fucking god, the moment S9 was mentioned she became way weaker and way dumber, and almost every member of S9 got reinforced plot armor, what the actual fuuuuuckkkk…
One by one, all the idiotic manufactured fuck ups:
Okay, so Jack can master parahumans without any range or brain count limit, Broadcast goes directly to shards - sure, he’s untouchable, author even correctly alluded to that, makes sense okay, no problem.
Bonesaw
Apparently she made a bacteria that trumps quadrillions of directly-controlled nanobots completely - fucking what??
So when Taylor discovered a hole in her perception she was like “oh nyooo adapting to that would take a day” for some reason???..
Like.. There are magnitudes more nanobots than this super-bacteria, just one-by-one wise, and she directly controls them, while Bonesaw definitely does not control the bacteria, this makes fuck all no sense whatsoever.Speaking of a hole in perception, the way how she has thousands of brains evenly distributed across her range and suddenly does not have enough focus to notice shit like that????? And generally started having focus issues??? With QA???
So she noticed this whole bacteria bullshit like super-late?..
There was a moment in the middle of the fic where she was like “with all those brains I aint got enough focus or some dumb shit like that”, and Lisa was like “arent your brains you, just trust them”, and she was like “ok” - that should’ve been the end of it.
During the Cherish attack she even let other brains control her body, and during most of the fic she cheated sleep with brains too.Verdict: an absolute case of author fiat, author just willed for Bonesaw to not get curbstomped.
Also another thing, “oh, my father and also father of my closest friends (Mark Dallon) is in the same area as Bonesaw and I can’t even see them.. anyway, going on by my day”, no reaction whatsoever lol.
Hatchet Face (and Mannequin was there too)
So, literally, in the paragraph where she described how he disables powers by getting people in his range, and giving an example of how Miss Militia bullets did not disappear, she also states that he disrupts her nanobot control seemingly utterly?..
A direct contradiction, I think she even mentions how her range is larger than his.
Like, sure, he disables her brains that are in his range, but other brains should’ve swarmed him and dissolved him.
Even if he does completely disrupt the control, which is still a contradictory fiat, she noticed them way too late.
They were leaving behind like some robots or something, idk, and heroes (esp. Miss Militia) got distracted shooting those - while you could’ve dissolved them all??..
Velocity and Gallant died gruesomely for nothing..Mannequins body being “as durable as diamond, except not nearly as brittle cuz MM hit him a few times” can be chalked up to tinker bullshit, sure, but not finding any less durable point (joints etc) and/or not brute-forcing it with more bots (they could chew through, just slowly) - all of that, esp. with everything else, looked the same - as plot armor for him not do die immediately and to pad the word count/emotionality idk.
Again the Hatchet Face completely disrupting here applies - although he fucked off with Kid Win or something?..
At least she managed to drill through him with endbringer material bots that she managed to bring there, fucking finally.Siberian (and Bonesaw again)
So the Siberian thing was actually ok, distracting her by attacking Bonesaw is good, and figuring out and killing Manton was literally very common case of “Siberian reverse fiat”, where the hero manages to figure out she’s a projection without Lisa - well here her multiple brains worked fine and she scanned everyone to find Manton.
Why didn’t she liquefy Bonesaw right then and there - fucking no clue, she just forgor.. - does Jacks op master power spread to his entire group??. How did the Siberian die then?..Echidna and evul Taylor
Exhibit A: apparently it’s enough for Echidna to chomp on your leg to clone you (once, for some reason). Stupid author fiat.
Exhibit B: apparently thousands of brains are not powerful enough to overcome a single fresh clone and she started taking over the network and corrupting the brains! Also if you are an evul clone and you did start to corrupt the brains because you got that sweet sweet plot armor, why did you stop?? Take over the entire thing!
The entire thing was set up for an annoying followup stupid arc of trying to follow the nine or whatever, it died and I’m glad it did.Echidna and Crawler
Apparently their biology is strong enough for diamond-tipped nanobots to be unable to liquefy any of them - sure, I’d eat this up if that was the only issue, or one of few.Shatterbird
Forgot about her, but apparently she covered herself with glass powder fine enough and controlled tightly enough to render her completely immune to the bots????? Go for her eyes then?? No openings?? What a stupid fucking contrivance. And GG immediately kills her, except she gets one more scream in, increasing injuries and misery yadda-yadda.Burnscar
Legitimately immune against carbon-based bots cuz pyrokinetic, actual logical counter. Dies off-screen to Faultline’s Crew or something?..There are more stupid shit in that arc, these are the ones I remembered.
Also Tagg straight up shoots Sundancer in the head and none of his conscripted capes, not even like Ballistic, shoot him in the face in response 🤦
And he shoots one of Bitches dogs and she doesn’t carve him a new one…